Sep 02

Slow Down… or Stop?

Posted by Carlos in Writings

Updated this story to submit to a writing exercise at the Write Turn.  It is all dialog which was the point of the exercise.  Will you?

“Are we just going to your folks? Would you like to do something afterwards?”

“If you like….”

“Hey, it’s up to you. I know that we haven’t seen each other for a couple of months, but you haven’t seen your family either. I know they are important to you. We can always do stuff tomorrow. Besides, I like hanging out with your family.”

“Yeah, OK…”

“So how’s school been treating you? I know you’ve been quite busy because we haven’t been able to chat as usual these last couple of weeks.”

“I’ve been quite busy, English Literature is been quite difficult this semester….”

“Well, I know you can overcome it, you always do when you put your mind to it.”

“Yeah…, I know. I was thinking that maybe we should slow things down a little…”

“Yeah, you know…. wait what?”

“Um…. we should consider…”

“So what do you mean slow things down?”

“I don’t know….”

“Well, you must know you brought it up. What do you mean by slow things down? What are we talking about here?”

“You know, maybe we wait a little longer before getting married or something.”

“What? Where is this… Is there…?”

“I have been thinking that maybe we should consider slowing things down a little bit.”

“Do you mean that or more?”

“I don’t know.”

“You don’t know? I think you do. Do you want to postpone the wedding
or rethink the engagement altogether?”


“Or, maybe go back to being just friends?”

“It wouldn’t be so bad. We could be like kissing cousins.”

“Kissing…. what in the world are you talking about?”

“You know we can start at the beginning, but still keep our intimacy where it is today.”

“That would be perfect wouldn’t it?”

“Yes, then we can re-evaluate…”

“No, I mean that would be perfect for you. This way you can wean
yourself off me and then when you are all done you can move on.  No, if you want this, it is all or nothing.”


“Because that is the way, we both move on if this is what you want… we both move on.”

“OK. If that is how you feel.”

“The ring.”

“What about it?”

“I need it back.”

“What? You gave me this ring.”

“No, I asked you to marry me with that ring. You just said no.”

“But it was a gift…”

“No, darling it is a symbol of our promise to each other to see this thing through.”

“You gave it to me….”

“When you accepted, taking it was making a promise that you would follow through with your promise. You are now saying you will not follow through so, I need it back.”


“Look, if I was the one breaking this off, you would have every right to keep it. But I am not the one breaking this off, you are. So in this case, you return the ring to me.”

“That doesn’t seem….”

“What doesn’t seem? Seem right? You are just now telling me that what I thought we had is not. Why would this symbol of that be so important that you would want to keep it?”

“What are you going to do with it?”

“That is of no concern…”

“Keep it, you could give it to…”

“I’m not sure what I will do with it. As I said, this is no concern of yours.”

“Can we still be friends?”

“I don’t see why not, you’ll have to give me some time though. Now please let go of the ring. Come on the faster we do this, the faster we can move on.”

“How much time?”

“I don’t know.”

“Please don’t say anything to my parents when we go over, I’ll break the news to them.”

“You go right ahead. I am not going with you so you can tell them what you want.”

“You’re not going?…”

“Come on, don’t you realize what just happened here?!? My entire world has been broadsided and flipped on its ear. I need time to process… time to think.”

“OK, can I call you…”

“Sure, just don’t be upset if I don’t pick up the first couple of times.”

“OK. I should get going then…”

“Please lock the door on your way out.”